I am a Year 6 student in the Uru Mānuka Cluster. This is a place where I will share my learning. Please note that some of it will not be complete, it will be my first drafts. Remember to be positive, thoughtful and helpful when you leave me a comment.
Hello Amira, it is Victoria from Hornby Primary Room 7. I like the detail that you did. Maybe next time you should add a lot more writing. Did your teacher check this?
kia ora Amaira it's Gemeve I liked the way you did a native bird the kiwi Did you think about changing the I's to capital I's Why did you put this on your blog
Kia Ora Amira it is lacie here. I like the blog post you made about the kiwi you made. Remember next time to add a sentance or two about what you had to do.
Kia Ora Amira Trinity here, I like your blog post about your kiwi that you made in Cybersmart. It was so much fun making a Cybersmart Collage. Maybe next time you could add capitals, full stops, and some more information about your blog post?
Hey it is Cayleigh here. Why did you put it on your blog why did you make it. i like how you put in on your blog maybe you can do some writing so we know what it is and why did you do it. Did you have fun making this ?
Kia ora Amira great job on your collage amazing job on this i like your kiwi its very nice and cool i also like the wing and the legs maybe next time you could write the introduction in your blog post but good job.
Kia ora Amira. Great kiwi collage, it's interesting and I like the wing because it has good detail. Did you think about changing your capitalization for the I's make sure they are capital if they're on their own. Next time you could put different textures in the kiwi for example the wing, you could make it a different texture.
Hi Amira its Aliyah here I loved this because i really like kiwis. This part gave me a memory about when i went to the zoo and saw kiwis. Maybe next time you could write a bit more about kiwis.
Kia ora Amira, Acasia here, I really like how you have added a picture on what your post is about I think that make it look nice. Maybe next time you could add more information so then your viewers know what your post is really about and get more information. Overall this is a nice post but yea just work on the more information.
Kia ora Amira. It's Miss Waho here checking in on your blog. I see you haven't posted since 2019. Hopefully we can get back to school soon so we can work on this.
Please structure your comments as follows: Positive - Something done well Thoughtful - A sentence to let us know you actually read/watched or listened to what they had to say Helpful - Give some ideas for next time or Ask a question you want to know more about
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ReplyDeleteHello Amira, it is Victoria from Hornby Primary Room 7. I like the detail that you did. Maybe next time you should add a lot more writing. Did your teacher check this?
ReplyDeletekia ora Amaira it's Gemeve
ReplyDeleteI liked the way you did a native bird the kiwi
Did you think about changing the I's to capital I's
Why did you put this on your blog
Kia Ora Amira it is lacie here.
ReplyDeleteI like the blog post you made about the kiwi you made.
Remember next time to add a sentance or two about what you had to do.
Kia Ora Amira Trinity here,
ReplyDeleteI like your blog post about your kiwi that you made in Cybersmart. It was so much fun making a Cybersmart Collage. Maybe next time you could add capitals, full stops, and some more information about your blog post?
Blog you later.
Hey it is Cayleigh here.
ReplyDeleteWhy did you put it on your blog why did you make it.
i like how you put in on your blog maybe you can do some writing so we know what it is and why did you do it.
Did you have fun making this ?
Kia ora Amira
ReplyDeletegreat job on your collage amazing job on this i like your kiwi its very nice and cool i also like the wing and the legs maybe next time you could write the introduction in your blog post but good job.
Kia ora Amira.
ReplyDeleteGreat kiwi collage, it's interesting and I like the wing because it has good detail. Did you think about changing your capitalization for the I's make sure they are capital if they're on their own. Next time you could put different textures in the kiwi for example the wing, you could make it a different texture.
Hi Amira its Aliyah here
ReplyDeleteI loved this because i really like kiwis. This part gave me a memory about when i went to the zoo and saw kiwis. Maybe next time you could write a bit more about kiwis.
Kia ora Amira, Acasia here, I really like how you have added a picture on what your post is about I think that make it look nice. Maybe next time you could add more information so then your viewers know what your post is really about and get more information. Overall this is a nice post but yea just work on the more information.
ReplyDeleteKia ora Amira.
ReplyDeleteIt's Miss Waho here checking in on your blog. I see you haven't posted since 2019. Hopefully we can get back to school soon so we can work on this.
Hello Amira, Its Sapphire I Really Like Your Kiwi. It's Really Cute! Maybe Next Time You could Talk About Your Kiwi. Bye!
ReplyDeleteHi Amira i like your kiwi that you made very cool
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